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Sample Essay 'Mustache It'
I would give the sample essay "Mustache It" a B-. The title grabbed my attention, however while I read the essay, I felt like as the reader, I wasn't really engaging with the writer. The essay, in many ways, is similar to what I have read in the past. Nonetheless, the writer did a great job by providing a strong thesis and backing it up with examples. Something I'd recommend for the writer in the future is to add a bit of personality in the essay. I've learned that grabbing the attention of readers is key to have what we write be remembered by many.
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