Comparing Owning a Car or a Motorcycle
Running head: Car or Motorcycle
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Comparing owning a car or a motorcycle Mark Applewhite ENG 121 English Composition 1 Steve McKenna 12 Feb 2012
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Running head: Car or Motorcycle
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1. he use "One" One must decide... [Irene RoblesHuerta] 2. other. Isn't that backwards? Isn't it tougher if a person likes driving both? [Irene RoblesHuerta] 3. consideration. I see what you have done here. The next step is to combine the last two sentences into one strong thesis statement. Also, while the numbers help you organize your thoughts they should be removed from the final version of the thesis. [Irene Robles-Huerta] 4. motorcycle. This sentence is unclear. When you are editing your paper please go through and read your essay aloud. This will help you catch these errors that are hard to "see." [Irene Robles-Huerta] 5. approved. This sentence is hard to follow. How might you reword it to make your point clear to the reader? [Irene RoblesHuerta] 6. $16125. good [Irene Robles-Huerta] 7. difference average difference [Irene Robles-Huerta] 8. economy. good transition [Irene Robles-Huerta] 9. vehicle. Nice job developing a cohesive paragraph. You began with a clear topic sentence and supported your main idea using details and examples. [Irene RoblesHuerta] 10. The Each paragraph should naturally lead into the next. Use transition words or phrases such as "eventually, therefore, as a result." For additional information, visit the Ashford Writing Center located in Constellation. Click on Ch 3.1. [Irene RoblesHuerta]
Single military members stationed overseas are only authorized to own one vehicle, a car or a motorcycle. This decision can be especially tough if that person prefers to drive one over the other. When it comes time to make the decision of whether to buy a car or a motorcycle, he or she must compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of the following: (1) Price (2) Gas mileage (3) Overall safety of the vehicle and
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Comparing owning a car or a motorcycle Mark Applewhite ENG 121 English Composition 1 Steve McKenna 12 Feb 2012
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Running head: Car or Motorcycle
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1. he use "One" One must decide... [Irene RoblesHuerta] 2. other. Isn't that backwards? Isn't it tougher if a person likes driving both? [Irene RoblesHuerta] 3. consideration. I see what you have done here. The next step is to combine the last two sentences into one strong thesis statement. Also, while the numbers help you organize your thoughts they should be removed from the final version of the thesis. [Irene Robles-Huerta] 4. motorcycle. This sentence is unclear. When you are editing your paper please go through and read your essay aloud. This will help you catch these errors that are hard to "see." [Irene Robles-Huerta] 5. approved. This sentence is hard to follow. How might you reword it to make your point clear to the reader? [Irene RoblesHuerta] 6. $16125. good [Irene Robles-Huerta] 7. difference average difference [Irene Robles-Huerta] 8. economy. good transition [Irene Robles-Huerta] 9. vehicle. Nice job developing a cohesive paragraph. You began with a clear topic sentence and supported your main idea using details and examples. [Irene RoblesHuerta] 10. The Each paragraph should naturally lead into the next. Use transition words or phrases such as "eventually, therefore, as a result." For additional information, visit the Ashford Writing Center located in Constellation. Click on Ch 3.1. [Irene RoblesHuerta]
Single military members stationed overseas are only authorized to own one vehicle, a car or a motorcycle. This decision can be especially tough if that person prefers to drive one over the other. When it comes time to make the decision of whether to buy a car or a motorcycle, he or she must compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of the following: (1) Price (2) Gas mileage (3) Overall safety of the vehicle and