Xacc 280 Week 8 Checkpoint
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According to her theory, self –care agency is a person’s ability to perform activities for oneself. The nurse then has to assist the patient’s needs by showing, teaching, and supporting. When assessing for patients needs, there are several universal self care categories. The first one is related [Passive voice] to life processes and the normal human functioning level. Activities of daily living are assessed. Is the patient getting [Doctoral rule (although good advice for any academic writer)--"getting" is informal English and can mean many things; in academic writing, use forms of "arrive at," "can," "could," "grows," "is able to," etc.] enough air, water, and food? [Unless in a quote, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing] Care is addressed regarding the elimination process. Is the patient getting enough rest and activity? [Unless in a quote, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing] Also [In academic writing, avoid starting a sentence with a conjunction ] , is the person safe in reference to well being? [Unless in a quote, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing] The goal is to promote the best human function as possible. As stated before, the patient has to take control of his/her [This awkward construction is a shortcut appropriate in a legal document, but avoid using it in academic writing. Write it out] own actions, and be responsible for their own health (Current, 2010). As stated before, Orem defines health state as the person that [Possible error--If this word refers to a human being, people are never "that" or "which," they are "who"] is [Clearer writing suggestion--Remove "that is"] characterized [Passive voice] by soundness or wholeness of developed
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According to her theory, self –care agency is a person’s ability to perform activities for oneself. The nurse then has to assist the patient’s needs by showing, teaching, and supporting. When assessing for patients needs, there are several universal self care categories. The first one is related [Passive voice] to life processes and the normal human functioning level. Activities of daily living are assessed. Is the patient getting [Doctoral rule (although good advice for any academic writer)--"getting" is informal English and can mean many things; in academic writing, use forms of "arrive at," "can," "could," "grows," "is able to," etc.] enough air, water, and food? [Unless in a quote, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing] Care is addressed regarding the elimination process. Is the patient getting enough rest and activity? [Unless in a quote, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing] Also [In academic writing, avoid starting a sentence with a conjunction ] , is the person safe in reference to well being? [Unless in a quote, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing] The goal is to promote the best human function as possible. As stated before, the patient has to take control of his/her [This awkward construction is a shortcut appropriate in a legal document, but avoid using it in academic writing. Write it out] own actions, and be responsible for their own health (Current, 2010). As stated before, Orem defines health state as the person that [Possible error--If this word refers to a human being, people are never "that" or "which," they are "who"] is [Clearer writing suggestion--Remove "that is"] characterized [Passive voice] by soundness or wholeness of developed