Tim O Brien: A Narrative Analysis
Cover Letter
Mrs. Dawalt, The majority of the feedback I received addressed my formatting. I knew when I completed my first draft that that would be the case considering formatting definitely isn’t my forte. I feel like I have learned a lot more as to how to format well by writing this. I’ve gotten much better at inserting headers, footers, and page numbers. I knew how to do it before but I almost had to re-learn it every time. I only received one peer review. The main thing that was brought up was my formatting and she suggested that I relate my response back to myself more because it seemed like additional summary instead of a response. I honestly had trouble doing this because I did respond to each quote and wrote out how each text …show more content…
O’Brian writes “As a big man, therefore a machine gunner, Henry Dobbins carried the M-60, which weighed 23 pounds unloaded, which was almost always loaded. In addition, Dobbins carried 10 to 15 pounds of ammunition draped in belts across his chest and shoulders.” (O’Brian 369) In the excerpt from the passage O’Brian attempts and successfully makes the reader aware of the physical strains each man goes through. Connecting even a reader who has never experienced war to the characters in an understanding of physical burdens. Yet when O’Brian says “He [Jimmy Cross] would imagine romantic camping trips in the White Mountains of New Hampshire. He would sometimes taste the envelope flaps knowing her tongue had been there. More than anything he wanted Martha to love him as he loved her,” (O’Brian 366) Later O’Brian writes: “His mind wandered. He had difficulty keeping his attention on the war. On occasion he would yell at his men to spread out the column, to keep their eyes open, but then he would slip away into day dreams, just pretending, walking on the Jersey Shore with Martha, bare foot, carrying nothing.” (O’Brian
Mrs. Dawalt, The majority of the feedback I received addressed my formatting. I knew when I completed my first draft that that would be the case considering formatting definitely isn’t my forte. I feel like I have learned a lot more as to how to format well by writing this. I’ve gotten much better at inserting headers, footers, and page numbers. I knew how to do it before but I almost had to re-learn it every time. I only received one peer review. The main thing that was brought up was my formatting and she suggested that I relate my response back to myself more because it seemed like additional summary instead of a response. I honestly had trouble doing this because I did respond to each quote and wrote out how each text …show more content…
O’Brian writes “As a big man, therefore a machine gunner, Henry Dobbins carried the M-60, which weighed 23 pounds unloaded, which was almost always loaded. In addition, Dobbins carried 10 to 15 pounds of ammunition draped in belts across his chest and shoulders.” (O’Brian 369) In the excerpt from the passage O’Brian attempts and successfully makes the reader aware of the physical strains each man goes through. Connecting even a reader who has never experienced war to the characters in an understanding of physical burdens. Yet when O’Brian says “He [Jimmy Cross] would imagine romantic camping trips in the White Mountains of New Hampshire. He would sometimes taste the envelope flaps knowing her tongue had been there. More than anything he wanted Martha to love him as he loved her,” (O’Brian 366) Later O’Brian writes: “His mind wandered. He had difficulty keeping his attention on the war. On occasion he would yell at his men to spread out the column, to keep their eyes open, but then he would slip away into day dreams, just pretending, walking on the Jersey Shore with Martha, bare foot, carrying nothing.” (O’Brian