My main problem was trying to make my definition interesting enough and giving it enough claim. Writing on love was a great idea, but I could just not figure out a way to make my definition broad enough. It also was not easy trying to make a definition of love in my own words without looking it up first. After I sat and put some thought in about what love was to me, I finally made my definition broad but to the point. Then I had trouble with trying to make the body of the paragraph …show more content…
I put more specific opinion in some of the paragraphs. By adding that it would help the reader get more interested in the essay and not question anything. When reading over my essay, I found a few places where I needed more support. One example is, when I was writing about the historical event. Writing about the love of Elizabeth and Darcy was a good idea, but I thought the paragraph did not have enough support. Once I explained the love they had for each other, I added some examples of their love compared to my definition. By adding examples it gave the story of Elizabeth and Darcy support. I also found another bump along the way while proofreading. My personal examples of love did not have enough evidence. I thought of some things my family and parents do for me. Then I added the important things they have done for me along the way and what they do for me now. Once I added a few things it gave my personal examples enough evidence for the