After Meeting With Mrs. Johnson Thesis Statement
After both conferences, write a short, reflective piece that describes: What did you revise specifically? - How did these specific revisions make the end product better? - If you chose to ignore some feedback, why did you do so?
After meeting with Mrs. Johnson, I had to review over the suggestions and reflect about the feedback I received. For the most part, I followed the suggestions. The things that I revised specifically was simple grammar errors and showing progression of the characters and conflict, which needed to connect to the thesis statement. In the case of the simple grammar errors, there was part of a sentence that did not make sense, “...how any individual would be lost, attempting to discover their own sense of happiness.” This part of the sentence did not make …show more content…
Therefore, I went back through my novel and found quotes that showed this progression. This, in turn, helped me to have strong examples to prove the thesis statement. These specific revisions made the end product better because before meeting with Mrs. Johnson I had three, relevant quotes chosen in an attempt to prove the thesis statement. However, after meeting with Mrs. Johnson, the quotes chosen represent a holistic view of the novel and were strong examples to prove the thesis statement. As a result, the overall essay and grading contract level improved immensely. Even though I followed almost all of my feedback, there was one piece of feedback that I chose to ignore. Mrs. Johnson questioned one of my three quotes that illustrated the setting, in relation to the thesis statement. This quote, in Mrs. Johnson’s opinion, was strong, but she wanted to make sure this was the best quote. I knew that this was the best quote because it connected to the thesis statement and illustrated the point being made quite well. In addition, by receiving this feedback,
After meeting with Mrs. Johnson, I had to review over the suggestions and reflect about the feedback I received. For the most part, I followed the suggestions. The things that I revised specifically was simple grammar errors and showing progression of the characters and conflict, which needed to connect to the thesis statement. In the case of the simple grammar errors, there was part of a sentence that did not make sense, “...how any individual would be lost, attempting to discover their own sense of happiness.” This part of the sentence did not make …show more content…
Therefore, I went back through my novel and found quotes that showed this progression. This, in turn, helped me to have strong examples to prove the thesis statement. These specific revisions made the end product better because before meeting with Mrs. Johnson I had three, relevant quotes chosen in an attempt to prove the thesis statement. However, after meeting with Mrs. Johnson, the quotes chosen represent a holistic view of the novel and were strong examples to prove the thesis statement. As a result, the overall essay and grading contract level improved immensely. Even though I followed almost all of my feedback, there was one piece of feedback that I chose to ignore. Mrs. Johnson questioned one of my three quotes that illustrated the setting, in relation to the thesis statement. This quote, in Mrs. Johnson’s opinion, was strong, but she wanted to make sure this was the best quote. I knew that this was the best quote because it connected to the thesis statement and illustrated the point being made quite well. In addition, by receiving this feedback,