Shark Vs Sword Fish
This quote gives the reader a sense of impending doom. You know the shark is going to attack and kill the old man. The precise description of the shark makes it feel as if you are face to face with it. Also, the long paragraph makes it seem like the story is going in slow motion. Even so, the sentences don’t run on making the paragraph easy to read. The comparison between the shark and swordfish was well thought out. It is common knowledge that sword fishes are a blue-silver color, and look aerodynamic, much like a mako shark. Even though this essay was great overall, the sentence fluency was merely average. From what I read, his essay was a collection of sentences with similar length sentences. The sentence group,”The shark swung over and