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Personal Narrative: Fighting The Revolutionary War With The Patriots
In the near future, I see myself winning the Revolution War with the Patriots. I can picture it in my head, every single little detail. I will be at the front of the army as we charge towards the Redcoats. We will be fierce and strong in our ragged clothes and bare feet. We will stand firm when the British try to fight us. If they beat us, we will stubbornly keep coming back until they raise the white flag! I know it seems hard to believe but if you see it from my perspective, I am sure I will change your mind. Right now I am at Valley Forge in the 1700’s. It is dreary, smoky, and cold but I always try to be optimistic. I try to boost my fellow soldiers’ spirits. I am usually successful, though most men are going home and not returning. …show more content…
Best of all they are surviving! I consider myself lucky to be one of these people. “Today we know that most of the army survived the winter.” (Roden 141). This explains that the Patriots still survived the winter despite the conditions. It was not like we had no help at the camp. “The Committee of five Congressmen stayed several weeks and was helpful in getting more food and clothing to the soldiers” (Powell 149). Congress actually did care about us. Also, contrary to popular belief, there were way more than 100 of us left. In February 1778 there were still 8000 soldiers (Busch 147). Although some of them died, we still have soldiers. And although some of the soldiers got sick, they all started off healthy and strong.(Dr. Waldo 151). If most of the soldiers are surviving, I have a good chance of surviving, too. This is the third reason why I’m going to re-enlist.

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One reason why my fellow soldiers would decide to not re-enlist is that the living conditions are not the best. “I am Sick- discontented- and out of humor. Poor food- hard lodging- Cold weather- fatigue- Nasty Cloaths- nasty Cookery- Vomit half my time- smoak’d out my senses” (Dr. Waldo 151). People really are suffering at Valley Forge. I am not going to lie, it is hard. I can see why some men would just want to go home. However, I am re-enlisting because I have a cause, there are less soldiers, and most of the soldiers survived. Therefore, there are more reasons to stay and fight than to not re-enlist.

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