Double Indemoralization Of Criminality Thesis
In these six weeks of writing class, I basically knew what is noir genre about and why noir applies to people’s inward world in the Great Depression era. The first paper I wrote to respond the prompt was about the connections and relations between noir and “the audiences of the time tends to associate themselves with the outlaws more than a decent citizen owing to the large romanticizing of criminality”.(my thesis in first essay) For this thesis, my focusing point should have been on “romanticizing of criminality”, but in my first and second draft of this essay, I messed up with the thesis with no explanations and reasons in all my paragraphs. I did not relate the crime happened in either the book Double Indemnity or the story “Red Wind” to
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They said if I put background section afterwards it will confuse my audience because the idea is jumping back and forth. After I reread my own essay, I thought what they said is right and I should follow their suggestions because even myself is getting confused after reading the body paragraph start with “protagonist of the “Red Wind is detective Dalmas…” I did not introduce when and why did the noir genre starts popular among the people. Therefore, I add the paragraph about noir’s historic culture before I jump to analysis the noir work from Raymond Chandler. Moreover, in the first draft of my rhetoric analysis, I was getting off the thesis I cleared in my introduction, so for improving my analysis I cancelled the whole paragraph which is talking about noir film and Hollywood. Lastly, I deleted a whole paragraph which is originally appeared in my first draft as a supportive argument to the thesis but with too much useless plot summary. To improve it, I expand the part of introducing the second kind of femme fatale evil queen by using some plot to explain how she uses her power and glamour to finish the crime.
They said if I put background section afterwards it will confuse my audience because the idea is jumping back and forth. After I reread my own essay, I thought what they said is right and I should follow their suggestions because even myself is getting confused after reading the body paragraph start with “protagonist of the “Red Wind is detective Dalmas…” I did not introduce when and why did the noir genre starts popular among the people. Therefore, I add the paragraph about noir’s historic culture before I jump to analysis the noir work from Raymond Chandler. Moreover, in the first draft of my rhetoric analysis, I was getting off the thesis I cleared in my introduction, so for improving my analysis I cancelled the whole paragraph which is talking about noir film and Hollywood. Lastly, I deleted a whole paragraph which is originally appeared in my first draft as a supportive argument to the thesis but with too much useless plot summary. To improve it, I expand the part of introducing the second kind of femme fatale evil queen by using some plot to explain how she uses her power and glamour to finish the crime.