cooking equipment development
The schemes below show stages in the development of cooking equipment.change the task wording more!
The first given cooking object A consists of clay body and a stone under it. The clay body is hollow and inside it the food is cooked. The whole object is heated by the stone. It‘s also the biggest of all cooking devices equipment given.Likewise, the first one, the second object B of given below is also made of from clay and heated by stones. Even though, it‘s much smaller than the first one, it doesn‘t seem comfotable to cook on it because there isn‘t enough space and there aren‘t any technical features [what do you mean? Not clear].
The third cooking device Cone showed ion the diagramtable is the most modern of allthem. MeanwhileWW [=tuo tarpu, tuo metu] , the top of it is made of clay just like as the other two cooking objects, the base is made offrom metal. It‘s heated by ashes which is obtained from the charcoal.log [it is heated by charcoal, and the ash is only a side product] It also includes many different technical features such as support for pot, handle, door and grate for charcoal. It seems much more comfortable than two others, however it‘s quite big.
Overall, the cooking equipment increased log [you mean ‚improved‘?] in many aspects such as technical features still not clear, shape and appearance. However, the size remained almost the same.
5.5 – 6
Task fulfillment is poor: a lot of illogical statements made mostly due to the incorreclty used lexical items.
Problems with cohesion as well: errors in the use of linkers, and generally, too little cohesive devices are used, which makes the sentences rather short and abrupt at some places.
Grammatical range is mostly accurte although not very complex.
Mariaus
The first given cooking object A consists of clay body and a stone under it. The clay body is hollow and inside it the food is cooked. The whole object is heated by the stone. It‘s also the biggest of all cooking devices equipment given.Likewise, the first one, the second object B of given below is also made of from clay and heated by stones. Even though, it‘s much smaller than the first one, it doesn‘t seem comfotable to cook on it because there isn‘t enough space and there aren‘t any technical features [what do you mean? Not clear].
The third cooking device Cone showed ion the diagramtable is the most modern of allthem. MeanwhileWW [=tuo tarpu, tuo metu] , the top of it is made of clay just like as the other two cooking objects, the base is made offrom metal. It‘s heated by ashes which is obtained from the charcoal.log [it is heated by charcoal, and the ash is only a side product] It also includes many different technical features such as support for pot, handle, door and grate for charcoal. It seems much more comfortable than two others, however it‘s quite big.
Overall, the cooking equipment increased log [you mean ‚improved‘?] in many aspects such as technical features still not clear, shape and appearance. However, the size remained almost the same.
5.5 – 6
Task fulfillment is poor: a lot of illogical statements made mostly due to the incorreclty used lexical items.
Problems with cohesion as well: errors in the use of linkers, and generally, too little cohesive devices are used, which makes the sentences rather short and abrupt at some places.
Grammatical range is mostly accurte although not very complex.
Mariaus