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These are some general issues with the essays:

1. Choice of region for the topic made it difficult to provide strong historical evidence. Certain regions provided more opportunity for discussion than others.

2. Placed emphasis of essay on the wrong theme (i.e. wrote more about the social aspects when your topic was political).

3. Discussed evidence out of chronological order. It is much easier to trace cause and effect and continuity and change patterns when you present them in chronological order.

4. Did not use appropriate evidence to support answer or did not apply the evidence in a meaningful way toward answering the question.

5. Chose only evidence from a narrow portion of the time frame – did not address the issue over a broad time frame (from early centuries B.C.E. up to 1450).

6. Did not include all aspects of the thesis or did so in an overly general way.

7. Failed to discuss, or weakly discussed continuities. A continuity does not always have to be something that persists over the time entire time frame. It can be something that developed during the time frame and still existed or was influential by the end of the time frame.

Below you will see listed possible ideas for what could have been included for some of the essay choices. These are in no way fully developed thoughts – just main ideas! Many of these ideas would have to be explained and discussed in order to qualify as a full response. I may not have included all regions for each theme – just the most commonly chosen regions.

Interaction: ( A comparison of TWO regions)

Middle East and South Asia

How South Asia affected the Middle East: Introduced Arab sailors to Hindi numerals and other mathematical concepts which allowed Arabs to develop Algebra.

How The Middle East affected South Asia : Introduction of Islam (700’s – 800’s) into South Asia alters the nature and fabric of Indian society – Muslims intermarry

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