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Blue Eyes By Courtney Zampino Summary
This response letter belongs to Courtney Zampino and her story “Blue Eyes”. The story is about a seventeen year old, London girl name Estee who is excited for Halloween and prepares to go trick or treat with his little cousin, but she has a strange encounter with a blue eye, possible vampire guy. What the story is trying to say is the dangers of curiosity, as Estee had the impulse to take a picture of the blue eye guy, endangering her life by what she revealed in the picture. Now let’s begin talking about what works in this story. The first thing I like, and felt it worked was the use of first person point of view. The way the story was told felt more as someone was telling me what happen. It give me a more personal approach, which made me be engage in …show more content…
The first thing to address is the missing of some pages. It is supposed to be at least ten pages and the story is around 6. I can understand maybe you were super busy but it will affect your grade. The second problem is the whole story is just a setup. Everything was leading toward a suspense moment and it just stays there. The story needs more progression in order to see at least the set up pay off. Finally, the biggest thing that does not work in the story is how it ends. It feels as there are some pages that are missing. The ending just happens with Estee running away from the blue eye guy. We have an assumption that he is something strange, maybe a vampire. We need some confirmation of what is the deal with this guy. Is he going to attack Estee or just leave her alone, and what is Estée going to do with his encounter with the mysterious guy? We really need some resolution to this story. It is clear you were going to a very mysterious route, but it just ends so abruptly. If you continue to progress this story, it will solve this problem by giving a proper way to end the story. Also to know some of the mysteries surrounding the blue eye
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