This is the extended of what to give the readers “The one that’s been on his mind for 25 years, the one that he didn’t expect her to be there that fateful night, which he remembers like it was yesterday” (1) “He’s back, the man who killed my parents is back” (3) I tried to leave this so that the readers know that he killed her parents but not really why he killed them.
I add in the piercing blue eyes to give some kind of connection between Abigail in the victims, because I felt like there was not a good connection between all the people in this story and why he was doing this to Abigail. This to me adds a little bit of a why he’s doing this “He can see her blue piercing eyes filled with terror, he smiles to himself, knowing he’s the one who put the terror in her eyes, just like he put the terror in her mother’s eyes”(4) This to me does add a why he’s doing this kind of factor but I still wanted that to be a little